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Friday, 28 July 2017

greedy




Greedy


Greedy was hungry so he went out to get food.
Then he found some apples.
Then he took the apples into his nest.
Then he started to eat the apples fast.
When he was eating high speed he made crunchy noises.
When he was finished eating he was happy he found those apples.

3 comments:

  1. hi my name is Libby next time you could put a picture at the end and say by Jayden.

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    1. Hi Libby my name is Jayden yes your right Libby I will put a picture at the end. thank you for commenting.

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  2. Kia Ora Jayden, Evan here and what an incredible story you have written. That's one of the best story's I've seen from you. You should always use different sentence starters for each sentence.

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